A light knock on the door brought me from my kitchen. Because we had just moved into the neighborhood, I couldn’t imagine who it would be. Opening the door, an old man stood there, who was dressed in dirty clothing and wearing dirty rubber boots. His hand hung a plastic bag.
“Can I help you?”I asked.
“Would you like to buy some fresh vegetables?”His blue eyes were hopeful. “Are they from your garden?”I looked inside his plastic bag and saw some carrots with soil.
“Yes,”his voice was soft. “And I can get some apples from a tree in my yard. Would you like some of those, too?”
My heart softened, and I wondered if he was badly in need of money. With a sigh, I said, “Please step inside and I’ll get my money.”
The next day, he knocked at our door again. This time, my little four-year-old daughter got there first. “Oh, hello. Would you like to come in for some tea?”Without a second thought, the old man stepped inside and held out a broken basket with several apples. “From my tree,”he said, removing a worn cap. “You might like to make a pie.”
The three of us sat at the kitchen table and drank our tea. It was obvious that my daughter liked hosting a visitor in her never-ending questions. “What is your name? Where do you live? Why are your clothes so dirty?”
The homeless-looking man laughed as he answered each question. His name was Mr. Locket and he lived around the corner. His wife had passed away several years ago, and his children all lived far away. He was lonely. His need for company had sent him door to door selling fruit and vegetables. Ours was the only door opened to him that day. 续写：
Para1: When he finished the tea, he said he had to go home and promised to return the next
day. Para2: Several years later, a small envolope was delivered to our home - a letter from the old man’s daughter. 文本分析：
这是一篇非常生动的短文，文中各种描写形式丰富，非常活泼。
如果把这样的短文看作是微型小说，这样读后续写就是小说续写。按照小说三要素理论（人物，情节，环境），我们应在分析这三个要素之后，方才动笔。其中怎么组织情节是关键。
人物方面。在这篇短文里，我们看见了三个主要人物。基于已有的描写，可以看出“我”是一个热情友好的人，“我”的女儿是一个天真烂漫的孩子，Mr. Locket是一个孤独、渴望陪伴但健谈的空巢老人，所以接下来人物的一言一行也要吻合这个基本形象。
环境方面。能看出，这就是一个陌生家庭接纳了一个空巢老人的故事，那么具体怎么接纳，要看文章的具体行文了。
情节方面。短文已经进行到了老人第二天的来访，第二段首句提到“老人明天会回来”。基于此，接下来的一段势必是描写或叙述第三天的场景。而第二段又提到几年后老人女儿的来信，可见第一段要谈到老人的孩子。第二段主要叙述信的内容。
走向，做到有的放矢呢？ 运用关键词法，以“关键词链”推导“情节链”。也就是，抓住原文中的某个细节词汇，在后文强化、延伸，以此为支线索，推动情节发展，深化主旨内涵。这样整篇文章就会更加浑然一体，文章的可读性也会大大增加。
思路一： 抓住老人穿着细节，后面复现，推动情节发展，即dirty rubber boots, a worn cap, a broken basket→clothes were still worn→why（为什么总穿旧衣服）。
思路二： 抓住关键词lonely。全文的情节就是围绕解决Mr. Locket及他们的loneliness 来发展。从前文提到的He is lonely，再到never felt lonely，再到any old man nearby would not be lonely any more. M an Several years later, a small envelope was delivered to our home—a letter from the old man’s daughter.She expressed ineffable gratitude to us for accompanying her father for years, during which his father spent the happiest time and never felt lonely.However, her father had passed away and agreed to give his homestead to me as a return of gift.Touched ,I turned to my community for help to make it an old
people’s home.From then on, any old man nearby would not be lonely any more. 思路三： 抓住细节词apple/apple pie，把它写成Mr. Locket与“我”家感情的见证者与促进者，即apple/apple pie →enjoy apple pie→(the old man)still remember its good taste. 参考范文：
Paragraph 1:When he finished the tea, he said he had to go home and promised to return the next day. My daughter excitedly waited for his next visit and made full preparations. As the old man visited us the next day, he was amazed by all of the preparations for him, including apple pies. His eyes were filled with tears. We became friends, and my daughter and I enjoyed the company the old visitor offered us. But before long, he had to move to live with his daughter and we hadn’t seen him ever since.
Paragraph 2:Several years later, a small envelope was delivered to our home—a letter from the old man’s daughter. She informed us that our dear old friend had passed away and sent us another letter written by the old man, which said, “Thank you for all your kindnesses to an old man. When I was lonely, you took me in. When I was badly in need of a family, you accepted me. My last few years are filled with happiness because of you.” 默写版：
Paragraph 1:When he finished the tea, he said he had to go home and promised to return the next day. ____________________________________________________我女儿兴奋地等待着他的下一次来访，并做了充分的准备. As the old man visited us the next day, he was amazed by all of the preparations for him, including apple pies. His eyes were filled with tears. __________________________________________ ___________________________________我们成了朋友，我和女儿很享受老客人给我们的陪伴. But before long, he had to move to live with his daughter and we hadn’t seen him ever since.
Paragraph 2:Several years later, a small envelope was delivered to our home—a letter from the old man’s daughter. ____________________________________________ __________________________________________________她告诉我们，我们亲爱的老朋友去世了，并给我们发了另一封老人写的信，信中写道, “Thank you for all your kindnesses to an old man. When I was lonely, you took me in. _____________
____________________________________________当我急需一个家庭时，你接受了我. My last few years are filled with happiness because of you.”
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